Matt L.

That would be fantastic. All have middling careers, marriage and b**s, lacking the desire to stay fit and trim.

Plus size kudos to you for delivering such an entertaining and impressive written story. I admire how you describe Brittney and can literally visualize her figure's portly composition. Brittney feeling conflicted about her size is realistic, I would think getting this heavy after being slim, her behavior would be dictated by a negative change in her self-esteem. Above average! Matt

This is an extremely well-written story, I hope you'll continue.

Another over the top, entertaining episode. Kudos!

Very intelligent writing, Brittney's transformation from svelte, athletic young woman to heavy, hog is mind numbing fantastic. Your descriptions and dialogue considerably above-average, I can accurately imagine every scene in my mind like I'm watching a movie. What makes this story especially entertaining is how the prior wish removed Brittany's apprehension and insecurity about being overweight, as if this had always been her reality. Laying bed in her undergarments, and impassively stuffing herself is something the former Brittney would never have done.

Very pleased you've resumed your epic story. Your latest chapters are above average. Kudos!

You have a keen writing style in which adds to the entertainment value of your story. I'm delighted about Brittney's expanding waistline, not only because there's an alluring aspect to a female developing a surplus of padding but it cleverly exhibits how much her life has changed. I likewise admire how Chole has embraced her popularity, and how she now considers Brittney the fat friend. Role reversal is very enjoyable. Your story is first rate. Matt

Enjoying the changing dynamics of their friendship; Chole's take charge demeanor akin too a woman who's always been confident, and in tip top physical condition while Brittney's fragility is accurate now that she's the fat friend, and she's no longer the leader but the follower. The method in which you depict Brittney's hunger, and her plus size figure is commendable. I can truly picture the softness and flabbiness of her form, her bulging belly spilling outward and the blubbery condition of her thighs. You've captured Brittney's experience now that she's the fatty quite well, her whining and uncontrollable appetite, the awkwardness she never felt before, and the anxiety that comes with her desire to feed but uncomfortable about her size. Chole's fabulously written, I can understand her concern for Brittney but playing armchair psychologist, she's relishing the fact her once slim friend now outweighs her. Your story is like a Hallmark channel movie that is distinctive to a specific audience. Kudos X 20! Matt

Wow! Your dialogue and descriptions correspond neatly. "Living life as a true fatty" & "You'd better start enjoying it". That's some significant taunting. I can accurately imagine Brittney's girth through your prose; the corpulent condition to her face, her portly form along with the flabbiness. Brittany's tweaked reality will be a tougher haul now given that she's enormous. I was hoping Brittney would become fatter, and you really delivered it. In addition, the dinning hall scene was fabulous, Brittney's appetite it appears has cancelled any effort to practice self-discipline. Kudos and then some. All my best, Matt

Thoroughly entertaining chapter. Zoe is depicted realistically in that she'll all aboard about Brittney losing weight but at the same time, relishes in her sister's chubbiness because it feeds her ego. Brittney's mom's disapproval makes sense, being in shape and especially at her age, I suspect she'd feel somewhat embarrassed among her peers having a tubby daughter. Britney's overindulging I expected, the interest in video games caught me off guard, but given the fact that this version of Britney is her 'fat girl' reality, I suspect retreating to her room and snacking would probably been the norm for her while growing up. Admire your descriptions, the well-fed look to her face in contrast to the much more slender quality, would likely quell a maturer look, bestowing a baby like face - Round face, plump cheeks, double chin. The hem of her sweater barely covering her tummy, pudgy arms, I can imagine Britney feeling uncomfortable because when she was svelte and in condition, exposing her arms and tummy wouldn't have been a big deal. You my friend have an epic story on your hands. I'm tremendously curious on how Chole will react when she sees Brittney, and the next wish. I likewise wonder how Chole is adapting now that she's slim and trim; popularity, the guys at school, that type of stuff. All my best, Matt

Superb chapter; smoothly written, enjoyed the banter between the family, dialogue and descriptions outstanding. The addition of younger sister Zoe is fabulous, especially how she's now the so-called golden child while Brittany languishes in her chubby sister status. Bravo!

Chapter 7, first rate and realistically depicted. A person's environment while growing up is a main influence on their behavior and character. This being said, the former slim version of Brittney developed her healthy ideals as well as her fat bigotry through her mother's specific ideals, traits and behaviors. You have a marvelous canvas in which too create Brittney's life now that she's on the receiving end of the bigotry. Very enjoyable story and especially well written. I'll add these two thoughts; I agree, Chole doesn't warrant anything terrible, and a backfire wish would be intriguing. And, going back to the story's opening paragraph where you inquired what your audience would like to see,; for me it would be for Brittney to become much heavier than Chole was at the start of the story, and having to deal with being the "Fat Friend" while Chole's increasing popularity has her involved with much more high maintenance and materialistic types. Thank you for writing this epic story. Bravo! Matt

Your story is significantly above average; smooth pace, crisp realistic dialogue and first rate descriptions. I think the novelty of your yarn is that while Brittney was insensitive and catty toward Chole at the onset of the story, she really isn't a bad person. Thus it's Brittany who deserves the empathy. This chapter was well written, and the motivation to stay in shape plot twist is fantastic. Kudos well deserved. Matt

Impressive story, very creative.

Here's one I wrote with Fan 2000 - http://thechangingmirror.com/phpbb/viewtopic.php?f=19&t=576